spocknh@msn.com
A unsuspecting guy brings home a big tited women from the club. Little does he know she has has other plans for him then sex.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 1.20
- BE: 1.20
- Characters: 1.00
- Technical: 1.00
Eddie
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Spellcheck. It's part of Word. Don't do grammar check it'll kill you.
DoubleH
Overall= 1, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
A joke? MS Word choked on it.
oscine
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Anonymous
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Where do I start? In the recycle bin.
katikitten
Overall= 2, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
One word - spellcheck! Did you type one-handed? You even mis-spell your mispellings. The premise is interesting, but there's no character development, and you have a weird idea of female anatomy. Could do (much!) better
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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