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The Overflowing Bra

Just another guy
Jen, a normal girl, realizes that some humans have a second run through with puberty, but only time will tell.
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Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 2

Good day! I do not see the conditions of using the information. May I copy the text from here on my site if you leave a link to this page?!...

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Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

Strange but true. Your resource is expensive. At least it could be sold for good money on its auction!...

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Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 2

I`m so grateful that you enlightened me and the most important thing that it happened in time. Just think, I have been using the internet for six years already but it`s the first time I`ve ever heard about it!...

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Overall= 2, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 4

I read online (computer problems) positive feedback about your resource. Didnt even believe it, and now saw myself. It turned out that I was not fooled!...

Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 2

Couldn't get through the story, the entire tone had the condescending attitude to a child's storybook and had almost the same style of writing.

Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 2, Technical= 3

Although I didn't have the same problem with tone that DH had, there is just not much meat on the bones of this story. The BE was okay but it didn't start anywhere and didn't go anywhere. I didn't get a good sense for the characters, and the smut wasn't smutty enough to make up for the lack. Pretty insubstantial. But it's a good start. The author has potential.

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