The Overflowing Bra

Overall

Excellent bit of Stroke, but riddled with new writer mistakes.
BE

The BE And transformations in general) could use some tuning, but the descriptions are handled quite well given the flaws in the way the story is written. A bit of practice will bring this up to snuff.
Characters

Cardboard sex toys. I don't mean this in a particularly bad way because I don't really expect much in the way of character work in a story like this: short and no-nonsense about getting down to the BE and sex.
Technical

The Nameless One needs to look out for the basics--particularly maintaining tense and paragraph composition--but those generally work themselves out with a bit of writing and looking at the writing of authors you enjoy.