The Overflowing Bra

Can't get past the horrible art.

Wholly insufferable. That art style was disturbing and distracted from the story.

I enjoyed it very much, thought the story held my interest and enjoyed the artwork (and yes, the BE action!).  While I do tend to find some of the facial expressions a little odd, I can't draw a straight line myself, so I'm certainly no one to judge.  Please keep up the good work; I've seen your website and really do enjoy a lot of what you do (especially the 'BE County'and "BE Coli" sections).

I love it 

Well, I certainly liked it.  Especially the beginning, when the meat of the transformation was happening.  Although some parts spooked me a little, like the horse transformation.  Other than that, it was great.

just being neutral here to give early comment. By far my largest and most ambitious work to date...hope me learning to use text and fonts makes this easier to read than  my previous efforts. I had a blast doing this..made myself laugh and cry and shiver a bit...the sequel is in the works as it doesnt quite end here..it could have but Frankie won't let me.

Well. This is a bit hard to rate in conventional story terms, but here goes:

Overall

Delved into weirdness that just wasn't my thing so it "lost marks" on that front. I also don't like the art style. The eyes, man. I just can't wrap my tastes around the eyes.

BE Description

Hard to beat a good picture and there are a lot of pictures. Whether they are good or not depends on your tastes. I can't fault the breasts, but I'll blaspheme: they were too big for me to appreciate fully. For me the growth is the kick, not so much the size.

Characters

Nothing really special here. A few of the stock archetypes not abused to the point that they go cliche, but not much evolution either. For a Comic it more than met my expectations.

Technical

I'm not a fan of the art style, but it was consistent and that counts for more here than my opinion. It takes a strike in the file naming scheme. I had to rename some files to be able to easily sort and read the sucker. Put a zero in front of all of the two digit numbers to get the story in the right order.

First of all: Thank you for using the font! It made reading what they were saying a lot easier, my only complaint is that with the layout it's not immediately obvious when people are saying what. While the story was somewhat cliched, it was still enjoyable. Have to agree with Bill Pratt about not just the eyes, but the faces in general. The bodies were well done, but the faces? Ehhhh. Unfortunately between the faces and layout of the text I had to drop the technical quality down a bit in my rating.
That aside, I'd love to see the sequel and see how the whole situation resolves.

I enjoyed the story, it did get a little weird but not so much it ruined it. The new text style helps out a lot too. Look forward to the rest. 

odd many of you find the eyes to be troubling as many fans love my eyes..its not traditional comic form and not manga..its just me...hope the idea of the story is worth more than the component parts and my artstyle....it's the monkeys paw from a different perspective and much darker than my traditional "wee im big" work..sequel is much darker...very evil

Can you remumber the images to a consistant 3 digits?
My crappy image viewer put wishful thinking 20.jpg after wishful thinking 190.jpg.  
It should have been 000, 010, 020, 030, etcetera.
And for the board guy... I would have liked to abstain from voting, so I used 3,3,3,3 instead. I hope that doesn't skew the poll.

Decent premise, decent execution, but I agree with the previous comments about the layout.  Also with the faces, it's not the eyes that are the problem (usually, though to pick nits, they're a little far apart and the irises seem out of proportion), but rather when the faces are shown from the side.  The nose is too low on the face and sticks out too far, and because of that, the curvature throws the upper lip out WAY too far (and eyelashes are too long as well; the proportions just seem to be off in general) - they look like horses when drawn from the side.  Previous works by this author have the same issue, but I thought that making one of the characters in this story actually BECOME a horse was a nice workaround for that.  Also, the profile view wasn't used as often, which was both a good thing and a bad thing - good because it avoided the problems I just mentioned, but bad because it was odd seeing the characters mostly from the front.  I look forward to a sequel, though, and hope that author/artist takes these critiques constructively.

what a waste. bad art, dialog balloons all over the place. 

Typical Gammrai... uhh, story? Plot that only a schitzophrenic Three Stooges Fan on Meth could follow and all the drawings (they're not art, gimme a break) feature rat faced walking stretch marks.
Move along folks, there's nothing to see here.

I guess all you people have never heard of cartoon or caricature drawing. Please, tell me every cartoon or comic you've ever seen had people who were drawn to anatomic perfection, and all those that weren't somehow took away anything from the story. 
How about some comments on the story itself, since that's why it was posted on a story archive, not a nitpickingly stupid art critique archive.
As for my comments, I think the drawings pretty accurately depict what's going on in the story, and consistently follow Gamma's style of drawing. Not everything that happens is necessarily something that I'm into, but that doesn't detract from the rest of the story idea, which could be a little bit more complete in some parts - maybe we're just expected to use our imagination to fill in the blanks. I'm still wondering how this gets continued.. what I've already seen of the second part makes me kind of uncomfortable, but I'm sure there'll be something good in it anyways.

Since all the feedback seems to be negative (or worse, indifferent), I will come forward to champion what I think is one of the most unique creators in the community.  Even the eye-haters have to admit that there is NOTHING quite like this out there.  If you just came for the giant boobs, you're missing out.
I have dug Gammarai's style since the day I found it.  She specializes in unexpected and non-consensual expansion.  Maybe others want their chicks to willingly pump themselves up, but I want a female at the mercy of a runaway bloat...that she can't help but enjoy.
And that's this story.  Rampant foolish wishing.  Fantasies gone wrong.  And yet, despite their despair with their various conditions, there's still plenty of sex and orgasms to go around.
I love Frankie, the smart girl.  First of all, she's cute and curvy.  (Best in the rain and the hot tub.)  She's the most collected member of this band, but even she falls victim to her temper and desires.  Her verbal torture of Bobby is utterly enjoyable.  And of course, she looks great swollen.
Bobby...sorry, people...is the epitome of most of us.  If his wish had gone off right...well, you'd have had 75% of the stories already  written in this community.  But he f*cked it up but good.  Growing boobs...uncontrollable lust...milk!  Everything we want...on someone else.  I admit it's a little hard to be attracted to the body and cooled off by the face, but I delight in the conflict.  Thank God Windfeather showed up to fix that.
George, the dumb jock.  Turned into the true reflection of himself.  But once the lies are out of the way and he becomes who he really is, he actually becomes the nicest character in this play.  Still led around by his dick, but he starts to care about more than himself.  I thought the bunny scene was pretty powerful.  (I suspect the current roster of feedbackers just wanted more boobs.)
Trish, the dumb blonde.  Completely reduced to the Barbie Doll ideal: plastic and unfeeling.  Removed of independent thought.  Not as attractive as most slave drones are made out to be.  But an absolutely gorgeous pregger!  My favorite panel is Trish sleeping on Booby...awwwwwww!
The best thing about this story is how it exposes the nastier side of what we think our fantasies are.  "I love big boobs!"  Then have some yourself.  "I want that hot girl to do whatever I want."  But as a blank mannequin?
Another thing about Gamma: she doesn't discriminate.  All fetishes and vices are fair game.  Horses, boobs, bellies, lactation, mind control...this is just the tip of the iceberg.  Go check her website, and you'll find aliens, giantesses, cows, multiples, and HUGENESS.  And if you look past it all, there's a pretty sexy brain back there too.
Maybe "be careful what you wish for" has been done before, but as a free 84-pic comic?  If you seriously can't find SOMETHING to like here, to the point that the only thing you have to say is "bad eyes" and "lousy NUMBERING" (petty much???), you're either as stone cold as Trish or as mean as the villain in the seq...but I've said too much.
There.  One for the Cheerleaders.  Amazing work, G.  Fan for life.

I love all of your work gamma. If anyone says they can't get this plot they're absolutely retarded. I think its a rather good one actually. I must agree, the horse-faces are a bit unsettling at times, (espeically cause im not into the whole animal/human thing), but overall the art's really great. I'm def into the TG aspect too, and every time you do any TG is always great. I'd vote for more :) Keep up the awesome stuff

I'm not going to be quite as rude as a lot of my predecessors, but i have to admit that there is something distinctly nauseating about how the faces are drawn.



The rest of the body design is fine, but i find something about how distorted the whole faces are so off-putting i cannot really enjoy the comics.



Can i suggest a study in methods of methods of drawing faces? Perhaps a little bit of self review and experimenting would lead to far better design. 

Sigh. What's with all the nasty comments? Complaining about the style of the artwork is like complaining that anime isn't like American cartoons. Gamma draws in Gamma's style. The work with color is really coming along, the story is good, the BE is good. Hell, it even has a decent plot. I'm not sure where all the venom is coming from, but you won't get any from me. Thumbs up!

thank u to the few that actually had something to say about the STORY...altho i'm presenting this in an illustrated form...it IS a story. Do some of you not read a book because you don't like the cover art that depicts the theme its written? I appreciate all comments regarding my style and flavor  of the art..., good or bad.. as long as there is something constructive about said such...I'm not posting to stir shit up... horse faces...stretch marks? I've never drawn a "stretch mark in my  life... please, art critics with no name...understand your comments  before you post them. I have stretch marks from carrying two wonderful children to term. Never found them sexy and generally hide them. Story. Content. Dialog. Be a critic, not a nitpicking dweeb that likes to focus on an item and condemn the rest of the effort because you don't like the one. Like a lot of other artists/writers, this is a LOT of work, and given up for free. I don't have to agree with you, but if you have a meaningful comment on the effort, it is greatly appreciated. The rest can have their AOL diapers changed any time.  I'm at gammarai@gmail.com. I answer all real comments and questions. Always have. I'll be here doing this a very long time. I love it... "This album has been viewed 14948 times since 07/23/05. ".... if you really have some balls to post more than " this sucks", email me. I'm not posting this to sir up anything...I posted my hard work for some honest and ral critisizm and espected such...some of you are less than objective about "reviewing a story' and making pertinent comments given the judging criteria...and frankly very juvenile in your efforts. I do this to entertain...please take it that way or shut up.

You complain about people disliking your style and how it is not important to the story, but as a comic book the art is almost more important than the story.  Saying that it is not important is ignorant towards the medium.  Also to be frank, I do not enjoy your style much.  The faces are distorted, and the breast are unatractive.  Well thats my two cents, take what you like from it.

I'm about fed up with the comments coming in and  the lack of understanding that this venue opportunes. In particularly the lack of understanding that what prerequisites a verdict.... such as the rules. I expected higher levels of critique than anyone taking one aspect and condemning the entire effort. PLEASE READ the guidlines...they are simple.. Or.. spend your time condemning a good and honest work of art because you dont like the subject matter....Piss off the fact that it may have been a great effort in that area of fetish and BE...ignore the impact of any of the elements of the STORY...REPEAT:STORY.. because you disagree with any of it....This is a STORY forum to critique STORIES based or using BE as a form or venue to tell a STORY. I could give a rats ass  whether your opinion is based on the TEXT, The NOSES, the FONTS, the COLORS or any other miniscule part or whole of the effort. I keep seeing idiots that cant express a well rounded opinion about the entire effort except for a few.  AGAIN... I accept all forms of praise and critique... it just better damned well be based on the entire effort and with descriptive cause. "art is almost more important than the story" ? Art is a medium to deliver a message/statement if presented as purely art..  if you were not paying attention, there is dialog and STORY going on...  "ignorant towards the medium".... you portend to understand it better than someone that has been doing it and involved with it most of her life. I have a collection of 4000 vintage and new comics dating back to the early  60's and have studied them since I was knee high to a gnat. At 38 years old with family that predates my interests by a generation, I understand the comic genre better than most, and have seen the evolutions and convolutions it has taken. Appreciate the candor but your realm of reference is way out of line, your comments superficial and immature, and like most of the bs I get posting here, totally disregarding the CRITERIA for judging a COMPLETE STORY and its total impact based on it's component parts. Fuck.. if you dont like the idea or premise, just say so.  But give me and anybody else that makes an effort here to post something entertaining here, to say something more than "one element is not my style, therefore the entire effort sucks". I stand by my work. Real and honest and intelligent critique I relish.... AGAIN.. my addy is gammarai@gmail.com
real questions and real comments are invited. Please read the entire STORY and understand it befor you  decide what you do and dont like.It's intelligently written and produced...if you can't grasp that..please be quite and find sonmething simpler to read or view.. It's a collective effort and by criteria should be judged that way.I do not see much of that here .
Raichel

I enjoyed the story. I like the faces. I like the breasts, especially the size to which they are drawn. The topsie-turvy curves of these overdeveloped women with bubble breasts and butts is something that I find strangley* attractive in a fantasy sense. Lactation to the excessive is kind of a perverse kink of mine. *Strangley, meaning, until I saw your work, I would have never known how much I liked the extreme style and exageration. Your art makes anime look propotinoate, and thats a good thing. The characters were the least liked aspect of this story for me, but only because I didn't like certain aspects of them. 

For pete's sake, quit your whining!  When someone writes a plain story, readers are allowed to critique the writing style and grammar accuracy, because if those kinds of things are below average, it detracts from the STORY.  But when you decide to tell a story in comic form, you are adding another dimension to the story-telling - you are opting to replace the characters and situations previously imagined in the minds of the readers with concrete figures and places that have a definite shape on paper.  You're supplanting text descriptions with pictures.  And with a comic or any other illustrated story, the dialogue, the characters, and the art all come together as one to create the story - and if there's a part of it that a reader finds fault with (drawing style, speech bubble flow, etc.), then it detracts from the STORY.  You're asking people to ignore the artwork and focus on the story, but you're using the artwork to help tell the story.  That's like writing a song and telling people only to listen to the lyrics.
My original review focused on a few of the items I felt detracted from the overall enjoyment of the story.  I reviewed the "story" in the first few words and didn't need much more than that because I felt that as a story it was rather run-of-the-mill, just this time with pictures (btw, "decent" is a word I use to describe something I enjoy somewhat but that just didn't blow me away).  As I said, I hope the comments I made were taken constructively, as I really want to enjoy reading/looking at your compositions - I sincerely do look forward to a sequel.  But just remember that when you replace text descriptions with actual pictures, there are some people whom you are not going to please.

Eggman...
I did not mean to insult you personally. My comments were directed towards the one hit wonders that post without merit, background or substance. I never have or never will expect to please everyone. It's an impossible task and there is always some fault ot my technique or style or just a plain lack of being able to express my thoughts both verbally and visually to the extent I would like. Just because Monet is considered a great artist, of Hemmingway a great author does not mean even the best efforts are without flaw. If I was a good as I would like to be at both, I would be doing this and making money,...which I'm not I do this to entertain and I cherish the constructive critque that comes my way. If I wanted to avoid it I would not post here at all and live in the "positive" coments that flood my website from fans. I'm not trying to  or ever have tried to consider my works immaculate. I'm not the only author written or illustrated or both that has had the frustration of a hard effort given a thumbs down because of one aspect of the presentation. Your comments I cherish. some of the ones my rants are directed at are not as they contain nothing other than stinging words and do not take into account the other elements of the story that make up the whole. My style is my own. I never demanded anyone like it. Again, this is a story. Posting in comic form was a challenge the first time I did it, and continues to be. It's a work of  love and given freely. Some here do not appreciate anything that isn't right up their particular tastes. I have leaned in my years catering to and drawing based on, a world of fetishes, some that sometimes I am not personally comfortable with.  The human imagination is a messed up thing from one human to another depending on your perspective. Myabe i AM whining. I'm soryy if it comes off that way. I'm trying to make a point about those that don't have a real one. btw, appreciate the upgrade vote from your first...accidental or is it better after the second read?
:D
Raichel

The breasts went *way* too large - I'd prefer they stop around where Frankie's did.  My advice for future works - heed Eggman's comments about the side view of faces.
I really liked seeing more realism in one of these stories.  I especially enjoyed Booby's side effects.

I really, really liked this story.  Thanks for this wonderful gift to the BE community.  I liked it so much I read it several times, I almost never do this, so that's my highest rating.
I know GammaRai's style is not for everyone but I've always enjoyed it.  Putting all this together, a story, important drawings for it is a huge amoount of work and I think it's well worth it.  I'm sure it's made many people like me happy while reading it.  I liked it so much I want more!  HOw does Bobby deal with her heat and milking cycle?  Does anyone get horsier?  I hope so!  Maybe it's spreading?  The first two thirds of this was just the right mix of fantasies and fetishes for me, and the last third went into the story.  Is there another wishing stick out there somewhere, in the hands of someone who doesnt know as much about it?  This is easily one of my favorite BE stories ever, thanks again.

This is a Erotic Story archive.


People are not here to read a good story.They are here to find something attractiveto jack off to.


If you want fancy story critique, why the hell did you post it here? I doubt that half of the people here even bother to read the story. If your art is unattractive, which, i might mention, it is. People are going to comment on it. If you don't like it, take your rubbish somewhere else instead of bitching at people about how they are rating the art in your comic, and claiming that the art is not important when that is all that 90% of the people who might read it are obviously interested in.



Again, i want to reiterate, in spite of all your insistances, that this is not a story, but a comic If your art is nauseating (which it is, people are going to comment on it.

I am not one to usually comment on stories presented here in this format. As a general rule, I either intially enjoy the story and read it thoroughly, or find it boring or uninteresting and abort the time spent trying to find something entertaining or intelligent about what the author is trying to say. I had not been aware of this GammaRai artist/author until her posting of this particular effort. After reading it, I was moved to  view her other efforts presented in this arena, as well as visit her website to see what other offerings she brings to this genre. While the term "comic" seems to apply to what she presents here, it is obvious she has and continues to delve into a multitude of variations of the BE theme. Her stlyle and flair are her own, and I appreciate if not totally agree with her presentation of various artistic norms. I have never seen anything quite like it. It's sad that an effort like Wishful Thinking is subjected to the asinine and immature postings seen here in this rating format. Her characters are well defined, the progression of events and circumstances easy to follow, and the BE abounds aplenty. It was a thoroughly fun view and I look forward to more of her offerings. Unlike  the previous posting, I do not prowl the dark corners looking for masturbation material. If so, this had plenty in it's own right. She is correct in her observation of the critiques being offered here. Pasta2 should be screened for being of adult age to view this site, and his insensitive and totally inacurate responses removed from public viewing. Ms Raichel, I applaud this wonderful effort.