After a freak accident, Ed finds that he can tamper with reality (including his favourite: breast size) by manipulating people's dreams.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.89
- BE: 4.06
- Characters: 4.67
- Technical: 4.28
CaptainClown
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
I haven't enjoyed a series or any story as much as I have this one since I first got 'into' this genre very good work and I also enjoy your writing style it reminds me of Douglas Adams.
BTW: I also like the 'tune in' blurbs at the end of each story.
Maniac
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Very hot and sexy. Would like to see more =)
G
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 3
I like your writing style, especially how you use bars and different fonts to show dream state or not. It works... surprisingly well. It could use a little proofreading - there are a few spots with a missing letter or small typo that made the sentence a little confusing, but otherwise you've done great. Can't wait for the next chapters!
gemile
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Daunte
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I liked it :)
Nothing to complain about really. A bit slow to start, but eh...lots of writing is like that, once I settled into your writing style it was a good read. The only thing that could be really added to is the BE description. I don't mean that you should devote paragraphs to it, but the last BE with Kimberly was the good one, you gave the impression of her growth through her reactions, and then they were there. Rather than the girl from the first chapter who looked down and there they were.
Having said that, I guess that was the point in the first chapter, she had no idea until the end...so maybe it was all intentional on your part. ^^
Mopey
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Brilliant. Really.
An excellent story in the 3rd-person-omnicient-tongue-in-cheek style.
Keep this stuff up. I appreciate your use of different fonts to mark the "dream" from "reality" sections. Oh yeah, the tag is considered harmful, stick to CSS. But man, your style is nifty, keep up the good work. Thanks.
Quadhouse
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Miranda
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Very enjoyable reading...all I can say is......more please !
GenericName
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
dini
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Great effort - make sure you finish the story - best I have read in a while now!
Fake_Name
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Far better written than most, Quite cohesive.
More please ! ! ! ! !
Benji Dude
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
That was pretty good, most enjoyable. Although I did get a little lost the first time Ed went into someones dream.
Keep it going.
Aahz.
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Well done though a bit confusing at times and might work better without narator commentary.
jayessell
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Howdy!
Looking forward to future installments.
I like the fact that the male lead isn't a jerk, and that, thus far at least, he has not misused his gift.
I also like that he isn't stupid. I know it violates the rules of this genre, but I think he will get to class.
I also like the fact that he is subject to is power as well.
I wonder if he'll do any more of that? Maybe on the weekend?
What will happen if he gets drunk or has a nightmare?
Kudos author!
rtpoe
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
A fine piece of writing. Good that you are avoiding the trap of going into the details of the BE mechanism, and just letting it happen. It's also a unique method, as far as I can tell.
shelby
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 3
good story line, like the charaters, i also agree he should ctrl himself i like kim keep it up. more please
MaxBigfoot
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Good main character, and I like Kimberley. Great sex scenes, once you get to them, but I liked the pacing. Different BE method, most original. Kudos, I too hope there is more to come.
NemoRex
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Most excellent story. I especially liked how you dipped into anime somewhat in this story and in Master PC: Roumor Mill. I would like to see more of that in the future.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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