cheviot@cheviotsplace.com
The girls are back again and trouble is a-brewin'. This file incorporates parts 1, 2 and 3 that were previously released as well as the new part 4. All parts have been re-edited and re-spell checked. (for those that wish to read just the new part, skip to page 195 - Part 3: The Trouble with Milkdolls)
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.00
- BE: 4.14
- Characters: 4.57
- Technical: 4.14
anonymous
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I hope there will be a lost girls continuation at some point. This is without a doubt one of the best series of stories I've ever read.
Led
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Really good story. I'm not a huge fan of the pregnant thing but it works well with this story. You were able to make so many things happen at the same time without making me (the reader) confused and at the end you were able tie up almost all the loose ends perfectly. That in itself made this story well worth reading. I hope for more soon.
flub
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Fantastic story. Great variety in the 3rd and 4th volumes. Characters are well developed with personality. I look forward to the sequel!
Merlin
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
I liked it originally still do, but was part four integrated into part 3 without a title?
Cheviot
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
The original parts 1 & 2 were integrated into the new first section. Part 3 became the new second section and the new part, part 4, became the new section 3. Sorry for the confusion.
Tarot
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
You have a real future as a storyteller. Your characters are a high point, as are the well thought-out twists. Your empathy and emotional understanding are a big plus. Things you need work on: the characters' voices are often too similar. You often get too bogged down in the "freakshow" aspects to tell an effective story. Your grammar in general is rough enough to detract, rather than compliment, your efforts. And the word is "shudder", not "shutter", which is a different term entirely.
Kailia
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
My god Cheviot, my god. It took me months to work up the time to take all of it in in a single sitting, and it was weel worth it. Beyond worth it. Your characters, especially sweet (but oh so strong), vulnerable Lisa are what drove me to hour after hour of induced reading. I could tear myself away for brief instances, but only a few. I won't (and shouldn't have to) mention that your universe and your physics are beautiful, but I will mention that your descriptions of the girls' midsets are. Great amounts of be, and a few other fun twists, not to mention the lavish and loving detail slathered over every passage devoted to those bellies. Great work all around, and thank you for devoting enough time to write three hundred plus pages of fun for free. Kailia
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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