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First part of an epic I'm in the middle of. What happens when magic reenters a world that has not known it? Things begin 'growing' out of control!
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.25
- BE: 3.25
- Characters: 2.50
- Technical: 2.00
Roget
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 2
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HorseRadish
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 2
Pertaining to both story parts:
Certain parts of the story were pleasantly erotic. Some of the words were improperly used and distracting.
The subplot about the wizards seemed to be completely unrelated to the story about the researcher. The author has shown great potential, but needs to refine his/her techinique.
B
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 1
It was an okay story but I felt like the researcher's storyline detracted from the overall enjoyment. I was irritated by the lack of effort put into the characters... you didnt even bother to think up original names... Dishwalla, Cold Play, Aerosmith...honestly?
Prototype
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 2, Technical= 3
Great story, about the names though, they are a little distracting, even though there are real names like Jen and Dirk, its hard to keep track of who's who, and it might have been a good idea to seperate both stories so they take place at the same time in the same universe but are separate stories at least until the conference.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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