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The Overflowing Bra

Cheviot
cheviot@cheviotsplace.com
Lost Girls 3: The Chaos Realms
A continuation of the Lost Girls storyline. New enemies, new danger and new milk dolls... oh my!
Average Scores:

Tarot
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 3

While the story badly needs an editor (for instance, the author loses track of just who is Mandy and who is Candy several times), Cheviot can certainly tell a tale. The characters are a strong point, as usual.

Darkheart
Overall= 2, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Not sure why, but this one just didn't really appeal, even though the writing was quite good and the characters were fairly realistic.

Blamandudething
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Best line EVER in a BE story "Come on, lets go blow up some nuns!"

Seer
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

Very good :)

Carl Marx
Overall= 3, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

This one got a little weird for my liking, and I found myself only skimming through the chapters about Candy and Mandy's odd transformations.... though the writing was of good quality, the subject matter just was not to my personal liking.

Gammarai
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Cheviot never ceases to amaze me with his evil twists and deep story continuations. Far from the "everybody gets enlarged and sex ensues" stories, his have characters that breathe and feel pain and joy at some of the most trying moments they are put into. At times the characters seem to blend a bit as he generally has several sub-plots going on simultaneously, but in the end it is always a joyful read. Skipping parts because the subject matter doesn't appeal to you is like picking the individual elements of a gourmet meal out and then commenting on the overall taste of the dish...you can't edit a movie before you've seen it and as a critic it makes the comments less than valid. And why does this rating format allow somebody like spew to post negative ratings without clarifying what he found so bad about every aspect of the story? I can not find anything technically wrong with any of it. It has a good flow, great dialog, and is full of very extensive BE of myriad types.

Milom
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Another home run, as usual.

Whoopod
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Excellent story, good transformations - great variety!
Obviously spent a long time working on this, it being over 100 pages! Well done!

HorseRadish
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

The link seems to be broken.

deux_anges
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Quality of writing and character development were excellent, but the rating is more a reflection of my personal tastes. Tranformations aren't really my thing and the large amount of it seemed to dilute the remaining breast and belly parts of the story. Nevertheless, there was sufficient to keep me reading to the end, something which other stories don't always manage to do.

DrJKL
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

I personally can't get enough of the ecclectic transformations.

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