This is AkioKid's first story. Ranma-chan wins a contest to become a model for Okina Corp's bras, but decides that she needs to be even bustier. She gets a potion to do just that, while Shampoo finds another method to increase her bust line. Who will win in the battle for the biggest chest?
Average Scores:
- Overall: 1.80
- BE: 1.60
- Characters: 1.80
- Technical: 1.40
Bobo
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
I didn't even bother reading this one because yet again it's reading a movie script and not a story. Pain in the butt to read, and very clunky.
ugh
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
This entire story line, if you can call it that, couldn't get any dumber if it was George Bush.
Pringlesman
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
In response to ugh's comment, It could be dumber if it were Dan Quail.
Fake_Name
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 1
Again, this is rather klunkily written. However, i suspect it's more due to a bad translation, or a less than perfect controll of english than anything else.
Also, how come each of the stories written by this guy say they were the first?
Brit
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
It's really not that bad if you are a Ranma fan. The characters and dialog reads a lot like the Comic/TV show that it is based on. It's typical fan-fic (Fan Fiction) quality. As far as the BE goes, it needs work.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
Due to comment spam, any new posts with http in them will be destroyed.
