This is a rough draft of an idea I had. Send comments to johnathan_double@yahoo.com
Average Scores:
- Overall: 2.38
- BE: 2.13
- Characters: 2.63
- Technical: 2.88
Benji Dude
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
it's difficult to rate given the state it's in (incomplete "project brief" would be a good way of explaining it) but it's got potential, don't like the age of the girl and the time frame of her growth is somewhat over done, nature doesn't work that fast.
Bozo
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
DarkHeart
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 3
While not badly written, something more than a distjointed brief would have been good. It does have potential, my suggestion is if you're looking for opinions on a work in progress hit the forums and see if there's anyone there willing to help. Then when you're happy with what you've written, post it here.
But I have to agree, the age of the girl was a bit...eh. Maybe make her a little older, but that's just me.
MrHHH
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Please don't use the story upload area unless you have a story you wish to upload. If you want feedback on an uncompleted piece, use the forum.
Unwanting
Overall= 1, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 1
This isn't a place for story "ideas". Take it somewhere else (like the forums) and don't clutter this place up with unformed ramblings.
oxomox
Overall= 4, BE= 1, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
http://www.overflowingforum.com/viewtopic.php?t=253
andrat2000
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
eehh, draft! Come back with a story.
oneaxel
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
get the story finished fast then repost
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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