The story of a young colleg-age man who stumbles across the fabled Master PC program, and bumbles along, trying to use it intelligently and for the good of mankind, but making lots of stupid mistakes. (This is a large file. If it were a breast, size, if would be about Cindy Fulsom-sized, but not quite Zena Fulsom-sized).
When is the rest of the story going to be completed? Much more than just a sex story, love the charactors and plot
Enjoyed it, thanks!
Your story was excellent. I really recognized myself into this character. He is very complete, thought out and through. Of course, there always a few slips up such as commands that -from my point of view- could have been spelled better but it spices the story quite nicely, so it's not a big deal. But the best element of this story was that there was eventually somebody that was considerate enough to make a good use of Master PC!
I was delighted by all physics and science involved, keep it up!
I also liked that the body changes were done with gusto (no gruesomely big tits or anything).
Finally, I would like to add that is really a shame that you let a this good story without a through ending (I mean by that that Arma could find her wife, recover her use of the master pc and find a better life far away from all that happened to her, for example), and it is even worse if you have already written 2/3 of that aforementioned sequel...
While I've done a quite through search, I haven't managed to find the sequel, supposing that you published it.
If you want to contact me, you can use this address, removing the spaces : benjamin . poncet 96 (at) gmail . com
Where's the rest??? It can't just end like that.
FANTASTIC!!!!!!!!!!! chap 41 on the way? :D
By and far the best BE story i've read in a long long loooooong time!The amout of details the author goes into is amazing.Ryver's style of writing is very well paced and gripping.Once you start reading you simply cannot stop until it's done, and even then you want more(that is probably attributed to the fact that it's unfinished as yet).The story is very original and takes a very fresh new take on the Master PC genre.Instead of going with the usual dark and actions and consequences theme that is usually taken in these stories Ryver makes a very light and fun approach to the story so that the reader is feels gripped by the story as well as satisfied..All in all a very good story.Keep up the excellent work Ryver.Can't wait for the next part.Any estimates on when it'll be out?
Truly unbelievable. Most Master PC stories I find to be entirely too gruesome, not fun in the least. Mind control is, for me, a cute diversion, not a grim and solemn enterprise. And since that first Master PC story years ago, people have done everything with it imaginable except what the first story did - have fun. This story has fun. It's positive, it's imaginative, the characters are fun, the twists and turns of the tale are fun, it's truly incredible. For me, this story is an instant classic.
The one area of improvement I would suggest is to tighten it up a bit. It's a humongous rambling story and it's not surprising that a lot of stuff should just kind of pop out of nowhere and go back there too. If the story could be cut into discrete chunks, it would be much more compelling. Some of the chunks (Venus!) might even stand to be expanded under this new organization of the story.
There's a bit where the point of view shifts. I was really psyched up for this part because we had gotten to used to the main character's voice for so long! But it turned out to be just an enjoyable tangent, not really something on its own.
All in all, it's a great story. A must have. And the pictures are awesome too.
I like your story quite a bit but the ending right now is a but dissapointing and somewhat out of place feeling.
Yeah, It's not finished yet. There's a bit more to come, eventually. I'd say it's about halfway done, so far. Or maybe 2/3rds.
Nobody summed it up for me nicely. This is far and away the best Master PC story I've ever read, including Xanthos Pendragon's epic.
I can't wait to see what you're going to do next. :)
Best darn smutty science-fiction novella I've read in a while. Quite original. You should write EULAs for software companies, you tend to think of every little detail. Plenty of smut, but not so much of the actual BE. I don't care, you write well, please keep churning out the quality stuff!
Congrats on putting out the first non-lame Master PC story.
This is an excellent story - again, it is probably the only Master PC story that really delves into the possibilities behind that program. Interesting. I hope he regains his abilities in the continuation and makes the world a happier place :p
I enjoyed reading this but to be honest skipped over the more technical stuff.
nice, but lacking in the BE and a little too much on the technical aspect
This is by far one of the best storys I have read in a long time. It's worth reading even if your not into BE. I especially enjoyed how he went into great detail to explain the inventions in the story. How he came up with all the explanations I'll never know. O_O; Keep up the good work!
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Absolutly incredable, best story ive ever read! few people have said its a bit technical, couldnt care least, it gives the story a great fundation. Way to go Ryver, ive read it about 10 times now :-) cant wait for the next instalment, any idea when that is? :-D thanks for a great story
Best story ever, wish i could find more from you. I've read this story more times than i can count, any idea when the sequel will be coming? i cant wait :-D love the way you have so much fun with it, and how much detail you've put in it really brings you into the world you've created. Honestly dont have the words to decribe how much i loved your story, really hope you dont stop writing. Thank You
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