Following in his fathers footsteps, Peter learns how to manipulate the bodies of women. - My sincere apologies for the first and second uploads! Im new to this. This is in HTML format.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.86
- BE: 3.71
- Characters: 3.00
- Technical: 3.86
Hivemind
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 2
one word: HTML
the text came out screwy...
DarkHeart
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
No problems with text format here, it was a cute little tale. I liked the twist at the ending.
great
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Bill Pratt
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
It blows up on Unix-based machines.
PintoBean
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
I'm not normally a big fan of domination stories (even mild ones like this), but the surprise ending really made it enjoyable.
LostInCleavage
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
A good story with a significant amount of text set aside for description of sensations and details as opposed to simply describing events.
Benji Dude
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Nicely done, well written set at a good pace, maybe could have done with explaining why David did what he did (was he aware?), I felt as though the ending was good but left too many questions unanswered.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
Due to comment spam, any new posts with http in them will be destroyed.
