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The Overflowing Bra

Tomb Raider: Legend of the Orbs
Lara Croft is sent out to retrieve the Necklace of Rah. But it is another relic, in evil hands, that will cause Lara a world of problems.
Average Scores:

Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 3

Not badly written, but seemed extremely superficial even for the setting used. Try to put a bit more detail into future stories.

Agent Dee
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

One of the BEST lara croft stories i have read. I always wanted to see lara find a artifact that would do that to her. keep up the good work my friend, you have what it takes.

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Nicely written and with a "Busom Of Doom" feeling to it.

Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 2

A fun, quick little read, but the quantity and extent of the typos and misspellings was mind-blowing.

Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 2

With exception to some mis-spelled words, it was very well written. Clever and fun.

Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 2

A decent short story, but as others are saying, lots of spelling problems.

Overall= 2, BE= 4, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

Certainly a lot of BE, but even breasts that are three times the size of a temple are not big enough to eclipse the technical errors or the lack of characterizaion.

Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 2

Just huge isn't much BE. And spelling errors 'en mass'. Even as a non english native speaker this was obvious. Just using a spell checker enough isn't enough. For example it won't find 'new' when you actually want to say 'knew'.

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