Nicole, having won the Lottery ius finnaly able to achieve what she always wanted. 'Bigger boobs, bigger everything!' Her Boyfriend certainly isn't complaining.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.40
- BE: 3.80
- Characters: 3.60
- Technical: 3.27
anon
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
You really have to continue this
Matt
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
I like it; Definitely a good first story...Looking forward to the continuation and more stories from this author.
IceOwl
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Please tell us you'll actually continue this!
joe
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
mrletters
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 3
Anonymous
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Some grammer mistakes (as said previously by mrletters: is she 16 or 18?) and the characters could use some more development, but this is a good start IMO and the development can be eased in I suppose over successive additions to the story. I'd like to see this continue to be worked on: definitely potential here.
Clovis
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
A good start but it all felt too rushed. More details and more time for the characters to experience the growth stages would help a lot I think.
Anonymous
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Stretch
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Good story! Looks like the main charecters are looking forward to more growth in this story and so am I.
gottlieb
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Looking forward to the next part.
professor grow
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Looking forward to part 2.
benji dude
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 2
Not a bad story, a few grammar mistakes and the glaring mistake of her age (is she 16 or 18). The only other thing I didn't agree with was the size of the house they brought, £35.5 million and they get a 3 bedroomed house, I know the prices of houses is ott at the moment but that's taking it a little too far.
Small dude
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Really great story, can't wait to see you continue it. The characters are a bit thinner than the descriptions, but it's still quite top notch!
boobmonkey
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
nice! Enough character to read, but a little more would help.
micamaca
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 1
You have to continue this
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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