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A young woman with a troubled love life, a primitive idol, and a fantastic dream.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.00
- BE: 3.33
- Characters: 3.67
- Technical: 3.67
nobody
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I really liked the characters in this story - the sort of growth the main character undergoes is not precisely my thing, but I liked that she took the male character's art seriously (and that he took it seriously too). Often the male characters in BE stories are somewhat overlooked, and this one had an interesting hook that kept me reading.
I would almost like to see this fleshed out (ahem) into a story about their relationship, how it started, and how it changed due to her physical changes. This is not a pair of characters that exist only for the strokes, so really get into it!
A fine story.
DarkHeart
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Have to agree with Nobody, the characterization in this story was terrific, something that makes your stories a pleasure to read. But it seemed a bit lacking in comparison with your past works. Either way, keep it up. :)
Bob
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
The archive is not opening with anything on it. If it's on my end sorry. Always did like your wrighting though.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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