The Overflowing Bra

Very little BE description, and the characters seem wooden and very immature for the age they're supposed to be.

formatting was terrible and if you know there's something wrong with the story why don't you fix it?  I think everything else about this story has already been said.

I think the story concept was very good. You did something fairly original here. However,I agree with Ice Owl about the BE description. As for maturity,being in the military, I see 30 year oldswith less maturity than some 7th graders. The formatting was unquestionably bad, but not to the point that is was illegible. I honestly do hope to see more from you. please forgive any run together words as the space bar on this laptop is flakey.

I liked it.

Actually I liked it too. Format could be better but it was a straigtfoward story told pretty well with all of the plot pieces introduced at the right time.
A few more shoes still to drop.
Write the rest.
ei

It's a good start. You need to get rid of the stats at the begining, and comunicate those stats through character descriptions. The formmating also needs work. Also, nobody says "OMG". :)

I liked this story, especially the scene in the stadium and each time she woke up to find herself bigger. You're not a bad writer, and much of your mistakes appear to be structural. I found your writing very easy to imagine, at least in my mind, and you seem to be quite decent at conveying imagery. If you want to talk about stories and such you should join the forum, I'd hate to never see another of your stories again. 

You need more consistent use of tense - throughout much of the story, tense shifts from past to present.  As a general rule, present tense should not be used in stories (of course, during character speech, present tense is fine - it's present for them when they're speaking, even if all the events have finished by the time we're reading it.)
A spell checker would be a good thing.
Please note that, while the difference between two adjacent cup sizes may be around 150cc, depending upon band size, the difference to the next cup of the same band is more than 150cc - breasts grow in all three directions.  The exact details are complicated by the fact that breasts don't match any standard geometric shapes, and we don't know what the base starting size is.  The amount of this difference is small in the first four cups, but as the cup size increases, the difference between sizes increases significantly.  It's perfectly reasonable that the girl in the story would think sizes worked the way she thought, but the breasts wouldn't have grown quite as much as they did, because it doesn't work that way...