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The Overflowing Bra

Mister Grey
Skies of an Alternate Arcadia, Part 1
A story based on the video game Skies of Arcadia. Aika & Fina have captured a pair of dopplegangers, & decide to teach them a lesson they won't forget.
Average Scores:

Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

The characters were a little vague and the story didn't seem to have a good narative. But I liked it. The BE scenes could've been a little more 'fleshed out.'

Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 3

I'd like to see more of this you've put in many of the characters but you've got tons more you could use and play with plus vyse hasn't really done anything yet, hope you write more.

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

It's funny how the video game generation has been warped by the evolution of the internet, and I wouldn't have it any other way!

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