The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Fret Pearson
Neon Pink
Keiko likes a good mystery, but can she discover who is attempting to enslave her best friend Janey without becoming a slave herself?
Average Scores:

Overall= 5, BE= 2, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

One of my favourites

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

One of the best stories i've ever read.

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5


Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Really awsome! Lavk of BE is not a problem because of the slave theme I really enjoyed. It absolutely makes sense in this story and such a thing for free... thanks!

Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Although there's not much BE in this story, the plot is really great. This is one of the mind-control classics, and trying to figure out (with the protagonist) what's going on is a great challenge. The BE described is very nice, but the main turn-on from the story is clearly the mind control. The characters are perfectly drawn and very engaging. The narrator, unlike those in many mind-control stories, is particularly likeable. We really do get involved in the mystery. Small touches enhance the realism of the characters as well.

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

I remember this story from 2002. Read it: it's a classic.

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

This story is a Hall of Fame Read!

Overall= 5, BE= 1, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

In terms of praise, you've written a rather good mystery story that kept me interested--so interested that I couldn't put the thing down even when no BE was in sight. The characters were intriguing, conversations were well done, and I was especially impressed with the Middle English sections.

My strongest criticism is the lack of any BE, sex, or anything overtly sexually related through the first 3/5's of the story. If not for the quality of the mystery, I would not have gotten to the BE--which is described well, but it is all lumped together in only one section of the story.

In all, wonderful piece, I enjoyed reading it, but too little BE amidst a very, very long story.

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

This is another true masterpiece. It was paced broadly; there wasn't ever too much happening at once. It's always good to have someone witnessing their friend transform. Look who I'm talking to.

You should keep writing stories; they are the greatest. Your talent hasn't diminished at all.

Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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