Three young women are the only survivors of an accident on a spacecraft. They come across an abandoned ship just as their food supply is running out, but something is wrong with the adandoned ship's food.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 2.60
- BE: 2.40
- Characters: 2.40
- Technical: 3.00
Aging Cream For Men
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Pleased to read intelligent thoughts in Russian. I`ve been living in England for already 5 years!...
4morian5
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Very interesting and creative, but the appearance of the characters and their breasts are not described very well. Also, it's very short, and they seem to get out of it too easily. Overall, though, it's a nice little story, and a welcome break from all the sex-filled eroticas this site is full of.
oxomox
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
I have a pile of stories I've written for myself which I've never published. I only put 10 up today. They aren't perfect but I welcome feedback on improvements I can make to them.
nobody much
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 2
This story is told from a diary standpoint, which can give good character insights. Indeed, the first section is all right, although I would have liked to get more insight into the problems of the characters. I don't have a feel for the urgency of the situation so I don't really care that the characters are happy to get out of it.
The only BE description in this is cup-sizes, which is very disappointing and not very arousing. The characters other than the narrator are completely undeveloped.
You can keep them underdeveloped and make it a stroke story, but you'll have to describe how the growth looks and feels much more extensively.
DarkHeart
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 2
This story has the potential to be very good, but the diary style is very lacking with details with regards to the BE, the characters and plot. As nobody said, the reader can't really develop empathy for the characters and their plight.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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