Three young women use and abuse a breast-growth machine.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 2.67
- BE: 2.67
- Characters: 1.67
- Technical: 2.67
Cmdr_Mark
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 2
Story really doesn't do much for me. The characters are a little flat, and the story is more there just to get from one BE scene to the next, and the BE scenes aren't really that great. Just needs work and polish.
Toymaker
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 1, Technical= 3
Short and sweet, leaving most of the BE to the imagination... I'm not sure if that's an entirely good thing, but the story itself was enjoyable.
oxomox
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
I have a pile of stories I've written for myself which I've never published. I only put 10 up today. They aren't perfect but I welcome feedback on improvements I can make to them.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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