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The Overflowing Bra

Tuesday Afternoon At The Mall
A young woman discovers she has a medical condition which causes her boobs to grow larger when she gets embarassed.
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The rock
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

Not much problems with this. All in all it's fine.

Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

I have a pile of stories I've written for myself which I've never published. I only put 10 up today. They aren't perfect but I welcome feedback on improvements I can make to them.

Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 2

Is English your second language? Your grammar seems weird.

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 3

quite good

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