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The Overflowing Bra

oxomox
Tuesday Afternoon At The Mall
A young woman discovers she has a medical condition which causes her boobs to grow larger when she gets embarassed.
Average Scores:
 The rock
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4 
Not much problems with this. All in all it's fine.
 oxomox
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3 
I have a pile of stories I've written for myself which I've never published.  I only put 10 up today.  They aren't perfect but I welcome feedback on improvements I can make to them. 
 Anubis
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 2 
Is English your second language? Your grammar seems weird.
 MrT
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 3 
quite good
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