The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Security Gaurd
Andie overdoes it on the candy
Average Scores:

Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 1, Technical= 3

Short and sweet. Not the best you've done, not the worst, either. I enjoyed it, even the ending.

Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 3

Not badly written, it just seemed very bland. Good first start.

Arch angel
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 2, Technical= 4

I enjoyed the story a lot, I'd like to see a lot more stories from you.

Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 2

what story?

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

I liked it although the story could use a bit of fleshing-out. I know, write another chapter!

Benji Dude
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

Not bad but I think it works better as an introduction to a much bigger story, needs more detail in all departements I think, keep up the good work.

Joe Monday
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

This could be a good lead-in to another chapter... I'd love to see more!

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