story about a girl in a special kind of competition and she meets her match
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.10
- BE: 2.10
- Characters: 3.00
- Technical: 3.40
Toymaker
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 2
No BE just a lot of futa sex The characters start out busty theres tons of misplaced homophones your vs youre etc no real conflict and no resolution Like its been said if superhorny dickgirls are your thing youll like this but its not a BE story
Murgen
Overall= 5, BE= 2, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
This is a fantastic read if you're into Futanari (a woman both a dick and a pussy), although it has basically nothing about BE except a brief mention at the beginning and right near the end, and frankly it was extreme enough to warrant a bit more detail. It's mostly just details of sex with two unusual characters. But, like I said, it's well written and if you're into this fetish then it's worth reading.
Silussa
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Not fond of non-ending endings; no resolution.
nickname
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Interesting idea, but it died out right when it was starting to go somewhere. The BE description stopped completely right at the time when it should have been the most detailed. I would like to see the story fleshed-out just like the lead characters.
buddyu
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I was hoping that the story would have went on threw a little more BE. Also when(if) they ever stop fucking what would the world be like?
Benji Dude
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Over all not a bad story but like someone said the characters need a bit more fleshing out along with the description of the BE. If you do revise it maybe explain why the lead character has her... unique ability.
basi_jelly
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Finish the story.
Clearly the only thing that can stop them is that they become pregnant. Then what?
Bejabbers
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 2
Very oddly written, didn't hold my attention...
Cmdr_Mark
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
Characters need a little more work, as well as the description of the BE. The ending of "and yeah, they kept going at it" really doesn't work with the rest of the story.
Rudeypunk
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
The open ending is kinda disatisfying. The wizard is also unbalenced. Why would a guy with this much power waste his time teaching these two a lesson?
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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