The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Joe Monday
Andrea & Company
Inflatable Andrea invites a friend over for a "big" surprise!
Average Scores:

Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 4

This is a story? Well, I suppose you didn't spell any of the words wrong.

Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 4

Not a bad story, and if you continue this by adding, say, a red head to the mix in the third chapter, it would be one of my favorite series.

Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 3

Very poor story, likeability zero. Inflation through air pump???
You can do better.

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Wierd but simple, straighforward story about blowing people up. Hard to say what in particular I like about it, but it just hits my fetish right, I guess. More!

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