A story about a girl and her experiences with VBH. She gets really big. This is part one. Part two, on the way. Well, as soon as we can get together and talk again.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.94
- BE: 3.56
- Characters: 3.61
- Technical: 3.61
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Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 2, Technical= 2
JJMastafunk
Overall= 5, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
anon
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
The file won't extract from the .zip...I don't know if the problem's at your end or mine
trigun
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
The BE description here applies more to the story in general. Sex scenes etc. were well described.
MrHHH
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
She grew older, her boobs got bigger, and she made out with some girl. Why did you break this up into parts?
DarkHeart
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Very well written, and one of the better first person point of views I've seen in a story in quite some time. But I have to agree with MrHHH, there wasn't much of a need to break the story up in parts.
The Toymaker
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
I'll admit, I'm a little uncomfortable reading stories about underage people. The writing was good, there wasn't too much by way of physical description of Teresa (although she DID specifically say that it would come later) you knew she was big for her age/size/etc. Instead of the standardized sports equipment measurements, there was some of her own insight on her size. The part where she plays with her friend was pretty sexy, but again, teens aren't my bag. I'll read the next installment, I just hope that it doesn't dwell too much on her formative years.
Grey Deth
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
I enjoyed the story and the characters. teresa sounds like someone who has accepted the hand God dealt her. Can't wait to read more. Just give us more description of the character and her breasts. :)
perlan
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
jat470
Overall= 3, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Yet another promising story, cut too short. Is this a new trend here?
Nevr2Much
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
It's a great start. I hope there's MUCH more to Teresa!
(Don't take the complaints of it being too short of a story too personally. Sometimes one's muse can be short lived.)
rudeypunk
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Somehow knowing that the events were true or at least semitrue made it all the more exciting.
brianm
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Very interesting start to what I hope will be a continuing story.
Nice, slow realistic BE rather than stories about wonder pills or magic wands.
Nice main character you can feel something for.
Just a bit short...
deux_anges
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Good background and buildup, now waiting for part 2!
benji dude
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
A great start to a hopefully interesting story. Keep up the good work! I can't wait for the next part!
longshot
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I simply liked the story!
Mugatu
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
eric
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
I hope this runs for a long time
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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