The Overflowing Bra

This story was given to me by a close friend, I honestly loved this so much so it had to give my first review ever. This was truly a wonderful story, my friend and I had a discussion regarding the sad current state of society in which stories like this are shunned. Much like the girls affected by the Phoenix. I truly hope for a time when this is not the case I would love to see a movie live or animated following this concept I love the characters and from the very beginning needs Tammy and Daniel to make it. I could feel the emotion in each tense moment up to the big reveal and even began to tear up at the level of pain and hurt the Phoenix caused Tammy. There have been very few that have caused this reaction. I hope the author does check this. I want to give them a round of applause and a big Broadmoor hug. This has inspired me to once more pick up the pen to the author thank you so much for your work. I hope wherever you are you are doing well.  

Good!

There was a slight lack in actual BE department, but other than that, I really enjoyed this story.

I'm sorry that it took me forever to come back to this one, but it's one of the first I ever read on this site, and I don't even think I knew about a rating/review page. I think it was new when I first came here. ....I agree with DarkEnigma that the weave of character interaction is really a let-down, and I'm not sure I entirely liked how the story actually ended. But you have an incredible writing style; you should try to write shorter pieces, though--your skill would shine in a more digestible chunk (this thing took me half a day to read! Yikes!).

I thought grammar and style were excellent with several peaks of flirtation and humor at the naivete of the main character.  The length was not a problem as it played out to be a very smooth and flowing story with several foreshadowings and generous sprinklings of humor necessary for any story.  I hope that this author is content with this piece as it was a quality story in my mind and I look forward to further fruition of his/her work.  

Overall, it's a good story. A few things detracted from it. Daniel is in a school, filled with sexy, topheavy nymphos, and he doesn't notice that they're nymphos? How stupid is this guy? A school filled with sexa addicts and only ONE girl hits on him? I got more enjoyment thinking about how the world changed when it was hit by that virus, than from the story. The ending was sweet though.

I liked it. but I will agree whit MrHHH that dan must of been dumber then a brick.

First the praise: Even though the drawbacks of being a "Pheonix Victim" are compassionatly and repeatedly expounded upon in the story, I really, really want to go live in this world.  The sappy romantic ending is also nice and almost worth the wait. But everyone in this tale, even though they have genetically-enhanced intelligence, appears to be mind-boggling stupid.  Just issue all the Broadmoor girls industrial-strength dildos.  One would think that this industry would be booming.  Also a "dating service" would be probably have been set up for the girls to use, instead of each having to fend for themselves.  However, I do hope for future installments, espically built around the theme of what happens to the children of Pheonix Victims.  The changes are genetic and permanent-- and presumably passed down in the genes.  This new sub-species of humanity would probably be terribly fecund, and in several generations comprise much more than just 1% of the population.  Ah well, all in all this is a very above-average story.   

I have to second Mopey on some of the obvious oversights of this semi-original opus.  I still have to admit that 3.14 has an inexpressible ability to keep the reader's attention over a long story (~60 something pages).  On a more critical note (more critical than the other critics), as a student of human communication, I began to notice a very large gaping hole in the believability of the story.  This goes along the same direction as Dan being kept in the dark for a large chunk of the story.  In human communication, there is a theory known as social penetration theory (if you care, the author advocates are Irwin Altman and Dalmas Taylor).  Social penetration theory says that when people get to know each other, they participate in a ritual of reciprocity.  This entails taking turns disclosing personal facts.  As time goes on and a relationship develops, more and more intimate details are disclosed in a relationship.  This does not work in this story very well.  If we trust social penetration theory, then someone (at least) should have informed Daniel of the psychological side-effects of the virus.  Since nobody tells Dan anything for quite some time, that would indicate that either he was disinterested in the people around him, or the other people wanted nothing to do with him.  Both of these scenarios are absurd.  A more likely story in the author's world would have been an early revelation of the virus' complete symptoms and a development of relationships with that knowledge.  This would have allowed the author to produce very dynamic characters with clear similarities and contrasting differences from each other.  Don't get me wrong, this story definitely deserves high marks for planned development and skillful creation, but I tend to nitpick about authors' weaknesses so that they may produce a true simulacrum, one that feels like a true story, even if it may be a farce.

Great story very entertaining, even though there wasn't really any BE there was mention of a girl growing in the past but not that was just an advanced version of normal growth.  I hope to see more stories similar to it in the future except with some BE and maybe a little less of the "poor victims" theme, I have to agree with Mopey I'd still want to live in this world

The story was very well written and I for one like the length as it means that some effor went into the plot and the thought of it (the fact that there was more to the story than JUST BE was nice, but BE is what we are here for). That said, there wasn't a whole lot of BE in this story, and despite his good grades Daniel did seem to be missing a few points intelligence  when it comes to being aware of his surroundings. Call it nieve  but I think just about any one would notice what was going on at that school with in a month. Any way, I loved it, so my critiques are just thatsilly critiques. Keep writing, it was good

Liked the story a great deal. As others have stated, the only
problem I had was Dan couldn't figure out what was going on.
Other than that, the rest of the story was good.  

Well played

The characters were likeable... and everyone likes a love story!

Loved the story, yea so Dan was a wee (ok maybe a lil bit more then wee) bit naive but, it kept my interest. Keep up the good work!

As everyone has said Dan's inability to spot what was going on is a little unbelievable not only in terms of his own psychology but also in terms of the nature of the world. Perhaps if he had been depicted as coming back to the States from an isolated upbringing somewhere abroad the whole thing might have made more sense. 
As for future developments in that world, it's clear that the Phoenix will continue to spread and that eventually its 'victims' might well form a majority of the female population. Which is nice in one way but I wonder how the idyllic marriage will last when middle age hits the husband's virility.... (Oy! The poor fella! Having to make passionate love EVERY SINGLE NIGHT!)

Nice love story. When it comes last to sexual intercourse the love act should have more details. Even you have the chapter "10 years later" I would be really interessted in a second episode on colleage. Very good work.

im happy to say this one of the best be stories i have ever seen. 5 stars from me. i loved the ending and the stupidities in it also. ^^

A really nice written story, one of the best I've ever read

It is a lovely love story, well written and enjoyable to read.

An amazingly well written story.  The characters are very well developed(pun intended).  I hope this author continues writing with such style and purpose.

As a pure BE story, it's above average, but as a story on its own merits, it's one of the best I've read. The story development and the relationships are described with much care and precision, and like most others here, I had no problems with the length of the story when such quality was present.

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Overall, it's a good story. A few things detracted from it. Daniel is in a school, filled with sexy, topheavy nymphos, and he doesn't notice that they're nymphos?
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This is quite possible
How many times have people gone back to their reunion and discovered  "_She_ was the school nymphomaniac." etc.
But I would think a quick internet search would have told him about everything.
But maybe he just counted his blessing and kept going.
I like it.
More later,
Vahktang

Like many others have said... A good story first is the best place to start. Dan was a little bit naive, but aren't we all a little blind in our youth? And falling in love? I hope the author writes more stories, based on this theme, and/or on these characters.

i was very imressed with this story.  The story flowed very smoothly.  I do hope that there are more of this quality soon.
Thanks.

simply the best story i've ever read...

Excellent job! I was looking forward to read an story like this. Keep writing, you are good.

This was a great story, the writing style is fantastic and the main characters are likable if naive as has already been stated.  However the story makes it seem like Daniel has absolutely no libido at all. He's a bit flustered by all the gorgeous women but he's never really turned on by any of them.  In the final scene he's just completely calm as if hes just doing a job that needs to be doing.  Tammy is riding him and can barely get her words out and he's just like "Yes?" "Anything what is it?" as if he's walking along the sidewalk with her.  He's a teenage male, its his first time and yet he's completely composed and can manage to hold out until she's completely sated?  It's pretty hard to believe.  It's still a great story though.

One of the better well written stories i've read...
I enjoyed it and will look for more of your stories to read...
keep up the good work...

I agree with all that's been said so far but the story could have used Daniel going through the inner battle the way Tammy did. Any red blooded male would be severely tempted in Daniels situation. Although having a more dispationate viewpoint works well I think that Daniel controlling his urges to have that truly emotional relationship with Tammy might have worked better. Keep up the good writing, I look forward to annother story like this one (I was reading well into the wee hours).

I This was an exelent story .I'm not to good at this 

Enjoyable read, if a bit long. 

I flat out enjoyed it! I would've liked a little more detail on Tammy's growth but that did not take anything away from the story. I do have to agree with the point at the end it is soo true, at least in my experince.

Amazingly well written. This story was extremely enjoyable to read. Keep up the great work!

First off, I tyhought this story was generally well written on a technical level and I did enjoy your descriptions of over-large chests even though BE was all but absent. Other than that though, I felt severly cheated when I finished this story.
Daniel really gets the short end of the stick in this one. How would you feel if your "girlfriend" was sleeping with every young male in town while you can't touch her? Screw that. I think any young male in Daniel's situation would be "playing the field" rather than pining away for Tammy and remaing celebate, no matter how close they are. How preposterous.

Bravo on a terrific story!  Slow growth stories are my favorite, and this fit the bill.  Thanks for writing it.

very dissatisfying, a turn off. See dark enigmas comments