The Overflowing Bra

fun story, keep up !

Normally, one does not escape from ones captives.  One escapes from ones captORs.  This and other techinical errors occasionally jumped out to detract from an otherwise good story.

I liked the whole story all three they fit together awsomely and it is my personal oppinion that you should continue with this particular vein. I would very much like to know if keeto and her friends complete their training and become full fledged fairys, and what happens if josh and gwen get "married". I would also be intrested to see if iris gets one of the dimond chains of the high counclor. 

please continue this story.

shelby 

Other than a few small grammar and spelling mistakes here and there, or a random missing word (ie: "this made [her] feel like a new person"  where you forgot "her" - this is just an example, not an actual excerpt), this is an excellent story.  Great story line, all the room in the world for a sequel, and even some good old fashioned mega-corp-bashing.  ;)  Even tho this story is 3 years old, I hope to see more from you - I like your writing style.

I thought the prose and character development was exceptional.  Truthfully, its hard to write innovative story mechanics within the BE genre.  The author made a great effort and produced a workable and interesting plot.  I admit to a small amount of envy over the tight wording and skillful dialogue.

thx a lot !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!11

Sorry I did not like the story. Maybe I have read too many BE storoes but I really could not bear to read about the feary rescue from the pharmaseutical(sp?).

I liked it, it was very creative! But it felt like there were...gaps in the story. Like it needed certain scenes to be fleshed out a bit more. One of the things I liked best about the story was how real life kept on intruding on the fantasty sex/BE scenes.

A very good story overall, just the odd spelling/gramma mistake bringing the technical mark down.  There are some smart parts in it and some, not so smart parts, however the smart parts out weigh the not so smart parts, well done.  I think there is room for a sequal, after all if the girls have been writing wishes on the paper with a pencil what's to say they can't rub out the previous wishes and add some more?

Sorry, my mistake, the previous comment by me was meant for another story, could you tell?  my bad... I feel stupid. lol

I just cannot stand it when an author cannot manage to spell his own name consistently.

The be was great, when it wasn't in a dream. I was starting to really get into it when it suddenly slowed down. As soon as Keeto began mastering her powers, the story moved away from BE and dragged on forever about some quest or something. The rest was great, the end was long and boring.

Very Good story, but it starts to drag on and on as it nears the end

Sorry for this vote. I tried to read it, but I couldn't even find a start to this story. Sadly there is no option for abstention. I would have choosen this instead of giving for all section only a 1.

Cute.  And interesting enough for me to read the whole thing.  :p

I think its a well planed out story, not too much one way but not too much another, as some ppl just want pure BE they didnt like the story but for ppl who like magic/ fairys / other stuff its a good story :p
Hope u carry it on!

After the starting introduction, I found this to be a slow moving story, though apart from the occassional spelling/grammer mistakes I thought it was alright which was quite humourous at times. I did find the climax of the story to be a bit cheesy though, but it didn't detract from the rest of the story.

I really enjoyed it....and there are lots of possibilities to go from here with it...hint, hint.

As with many of your other stories, what could have been a really great story got bogged down by your poor technical skills.