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A small tale of a woman who's rescued from her loneliness by a stranger. She's overworked and underpaid. So her body releases its stored bounty of hormones and rebels against her in a spectacular way.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 2.17
- BE: 2.17
- Characters: 1.83
- Technical: 3.83
MrHHH
Overall= 2, BE= 4, Characters= 2, Technical= 5
One page? That's not a story, that's a Hallmark card.
Boofer
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 3
Grey Deth
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 3
The story is best described as a 'quickie but goodie'. Not long enough to really get into the characters or growth...but still worth reading.
The_Hype
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
No spelling errors or grammar errors that stand out... But this one is waaaay short! More a warm-up story than anything else... but cute in it's own way, and well worth the time it took to write.
Arby
Overall= 2, BE= 1, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
I'm left puzzled at the method, motivations. . . really, any and everything. This reads like the sketch of what a fully-formed BE story might grow from, but not a story in and of itself.
benji dude
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Good but just too darn short. I would concider re-writing this into a more "fleshed" out story, maybe explain why her boobs started to expand, the relevence of having a paramedic next door, love interest maybe? Something to think about.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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