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A lonely man is helped by caring supervisor. I tried to introduce more details and character development.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.75
- BE: 3.50
- Characters: 4.00
- Technical: 4.25
MrHHH
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Lack of BE description, at least one word missing completely, really detracts from the story.
xxxecil
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
I really enjoy stories of this sort, but more BE imagery would add a lot to the story.
benji dude
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Good story although furries aren't exactly my thing BE is! Where was it? I would have given it straight 4's if you had included BE! Good story though.
Bogrh
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
The story itself was IMHO more interesting than most. At first, I was afraid the furriness would put me off, but when the character changed her appearance, I found that it wasn't a problem at all. Rather it seemed to add to the characters themselves.
There seemed to be a few dropped words in sentences, such as the following: "She placed his between her globes and hugged him to her chest. He felt become gradually swell and press against him." and “I didn’t know that Triaves could that!�.
I agree that something seems a bit lacking in the sex scene. I would suggest adding some auditory details and perhaps additional sensory details. Also, it sounds like he thrusts a few times into her cleavage and in the next sentence he is already spent. Right in that area would be a great place to add some more description and BE if you'd like. That way it is now is kind of a let down.
In any case, I liked your story a lot and I am eager to see what else you can come up with.
-Bogrh
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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