A new STD gets let loose with some desirable and bizarre results.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.33
- BE: 3.20
- Characters: 2.93
- Technical: 2.80
Anon
Overall= 2, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Very mechanical in storytelling, with paper thin characters and very basic scenarios.
potatodave
Overall= 1, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Couldn't finish it. Dialogue is terrible and I get the sense the author has no real concept of size with a college girl beginning the story with a cup size that just doesn't really make sense for her proposed frame. It also continues to refer to the breasts by cup sizes no one could possibly be familiar with.
Un Known
Overall= 1, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
This is more like a rough draft than a finished story. The characters are weak and poorly crafted. The dialogue is awful. I give it a 2 for BE description simply because of the quantity, not the quality. This could be turned into something decent with a lot of polishing and hard work, but it's probably not worth it, as there's nothing original here. Sorry, but this was bad.
Growthfan
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Not bad. Don't get in a hurry to describe a million different scenes; a few well-crafted encounters are more interesting, and can be more challenging to the author's skills. Keep up the good work.
X-Greg
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Very good story, it's interesting seeing characters making each of their fantasy come true.
More could be good (perhaps a sequel)
Bravo
IceOwl
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Great story, could use some character development.. and maybe a sequel. ;)
Anonymous
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
I'm too lazy to leave any feedback. The most valuable thing a reader can give an author.
Anonymous
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
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Anonymous
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I'm too lazy to leave any feedback. The most valuable thing a reader can give an author.
andrat2000
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Reading is a waste of time. Everybody in the story gets big tits and cocks. Story jumps to a dozen of BE and shrinks. Same old ideas.
Prophet Tenebrae
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
This really is horrible - it's the personification of all that is wrong with BE stories that have been written of late. If you're going to write a story, why not at least have the decency to make a go at it?
This story would probably just have been better off as an idea that never got penned, I struggle to think of any moment when I wasn't reminded that this story was a horrible living cliche of the average 2 dimensional BE story.
Anonymous
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I'm too lazy to leave any feedback. The most valuable thing a reader can give an author.
MrHHH
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Hope to see a second chapter...
Anonymous
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I'm too lazy to leave any feedback. The most valuable thing a reader can give an author.
Anonymous
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 2
Little overall character depth once full BE gets started. Found the story to be okay, but a tad shallow.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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