The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

DD-Red Shoes
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Delayed reaction
A stressed out Business women ventures into using an experimental pill. The results do not have timing but are highly effective.
It's a story that is stranger being true rather than fictional
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 JJM75
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 2 
This story is awful. The grammar is atrocious, and gets in the way of ANY enjoyment.
 DarkHeart
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 2 
Not bad as things go, but your spelling and grammar need some work. It feel like the story was being told by a 9 year old, not a grown man.
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