The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Wholeman
Unknown
Where No Man Has Gone Before
Driving alone at night, be warry of pink spotlights!
Average Scores:
 Denkkar
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4 
I greatly enjoyed this story. It recycles the UFO abduction theme, but is otherwise hugely creative and original. Transgender lesbian sex for the win I say! However I do have a few criticisms:
* Slightly below average technical quality. It's readable but some of the content might have been lost or incorrectly interpreted due to lack of proofreading.
* Lacking in plot. There's no real conflict here, no evil arch nemesis, no hard choices! IMO life must be hard to be enjoyable.
Thanks for writing Wholeman.
 Vahktang
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3 
   What was the alien wearing?
   They have some sex, they get into more sex, she then strips, etc.
   She's wearing a skirt, but, besides that?
   I put her into a sailor's outfit, brief, sleevless top, short skirt, boots, I don't know about you people.
   In any case, could have used another run down a grammer checker.
   But on the other hand, I did copy it, edit it and make a hard copy, one of my best praises.
   More please
   (one of the better compliments I know of)
More later,
Vahktang
 Wholeman
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5 
I loved it!
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