The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

ExpansionPhD
Poor Planning Has Consequences
A short story (my first), about failing to plan ahead...
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 Julia
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4 
Great first attempt. I would add a section break in the story where you change character perspectives.
 Dave
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4 
I really enjoyed this story overall. I found the growth description to be a little lacking, but that didn't really impact my overall enjoyment.

I'd love to see a continuation of this!
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