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The Overflowing Bra

Pharoid K
Campfire
Four friends hanging out around a campfire wish for their perfect, ideal girlfriends. Their wishes come true... but not in the way they expected.
Average Scores:
 Jerrycan
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1 
Not great. Barely 2 pages. Here's 4 boys. Imagine your ideal imaginary doll. Become. Stories done
 Soylent Orange
Overall= 2, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 3 
Feels very onehandedtyping. Decent premise, just next time make it longer than a postit note.
 RedGhost
Overall= 2, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 3 
Sets the scene well enough, but it is very short on content. Deserves follow up chapters.
 Mashley
Overall= 2, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 3 
Overall lacking quality content
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