The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

a-spooky-ghost
V.I.B.E.
Gifted with the latest in VR gaming, could John be responsible for Janice and Lara's growing rivalry?
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M
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
No permission to extract the file.
Alyzero
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Most of the comments below are about the file, but I had no problems. I thought the story was great! Really like how your style is developing.
no issues
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
opens fine
aspookyghost
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
is anybody else having this problem? i tested it prior to upload, and then downloaded it myself just now and it extracted just fine, so i am wondering if there's something on my end that blinds me to the issue. if it's really serious, i will reupload!
Kushlava
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Can't extract the file 
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