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The Overflowing Bra

Zantar
Tits for Brains
Your new girlfriends tits seem to be taking over her mind! Not that your complaining! Dialogue stolen from my life.
Average Scores:

xtra123
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Great story. Great direction. Just needs more polished writing Still a fun read. 
PornProfile
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Excellent story. It wasn't bogged down with any unnecessary dialogue, characters, or worldbuilding nonsense. Just sexy and straight to the point.

I would love to see more short oneoffs like this.
DeadJackalope
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Love the premise so much, thank you for writing it. So many stories brush up against these themes, but very few focus on them or lean into them to this degree. For those interested, the only other story I know of that explores these themes to anywhere near this extent is Kowalski's Second Childhood available on this site.

I enjoyed reading this a great deal. Would love to read more from you! Would also love to see this premise explored more!
xtra123
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Again, a great premise. Wildly erotic in a crazy, frantic way which I liked. Just needs polish and depth. Theres so much more to the characters and how they perceived and struggled with the consequences of their actions  so much more that could have been explored.
Still a great story with wonderful creativity. Thanks for sharing with us. I really hope to see more of your writing here!
Oofa Doofa
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
So hot
Globly
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
This was really good! Excited to see more from you
Some guy
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Really liked it. An idea I hadn't seen before
Cadfael
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 2
I liked the concept. I really did! I haven't seen this kind of thing very often and I've been into this fetish for almost two decades.
But this needs a lot more work. I'm not expecting a whole lot from these stories, but I never really learned anything about the characters. I know Megan's name, a bit about her huge tits, and not really anything else. As for the viewpoint character, all I know about them is that they have a dick and like giant tits. Not even a name. They're someone with a penis who likes giant tits. Those two traits can definitely be relatable, yes, but I would have at least liked a name. Megan's tits had more agency and made more decisions than any other character in this story.
Oddly, considering that last sentence, The breast expansion is rather lacking too. There's no real substance or consequences to it other than how it affects her sex life, other than a few throwaway lines about becoming immobile and outgrowing her clothes. 
I would have loved to hear more about how inconvenient they are, how she tries to get on with her life despite tits that always get in the way, how their size forces her to adapt, how their weight knocks objects, and, eventually, people over when she turns around too fast, and an escalating sense that they really are just taking over her life, even outside of possession. I would have loved to see her become a conflicted but ultimately willing hostage for her own overripening melons as they took over her life.
Finally, you need to work on your writing in general. The dialog is almost entirly dirty talk, which is fine and all, but I never really got the sense they really loved each other so much as her tits conditioned her to love him because he was useful to make her tits grow. And that's something I actually would've really liked if that was intentional. Furthermore, there are multiple paragraphs that desperately need breaking up, and the whole thing has a kind of stream of consciousness feel to it, like you wrote it all, used a spellchecker, and sent it in immediately.
I hope you are not too terribly discouraged by this review, you had a great idea. I've only found a handful of stories with a similar premise.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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