The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

HarmonyMotion
Halo
A greedy insatiable wife who wants nothing but to be admired, worshipped, exalted, finds a special artifact from Heaven that grants her her every wish without her realizing it.

Can anyone figure out in time to stop her?
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BismuthPirate
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I'll have to echo SomeGuy here the superhero element is intrusive and the breast expansion something of an afterthought. Decent characters, decent technical quality, but it didn't really grab me.
Boris
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Really nice. Thanks for sharing.
Boris
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Really nice. Thanks for sharing.
SomeGuy
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Simple but effective characterizations in a simple but effective plot. I appreciated that instead of trying to do too much, the premise was straightforward and the plot actually built to some kind of resolution. The epilogue was cute, too.
On the downside, the superhero element felt really out of left field and reminded me of the contributor HikerAngel and their kind of obsessive paraphilia regarding Supergirl, an intrusive fetish that frequently got in the way of what was going on in HikerAngel's often otherwise pretty good stories. And like HikerAngel, the BE content here felt like an afterthought we're told her boobs are big, but now how big. They're called orbs and melons a couple of times basically in passing. There was a short buttonpopping sequence but it felt like something dropped into a preexisting story for the sake of having a pretext to upload to this site. It's an issue where the writer just feels fundamentally not that interested in breasts, and as a result neither are the characters. Lastly, there were issues with the technical execution nothing awful, but it felt like it was written in a hurry and not proofread. The husband's name randomly switches to Jeff for one line.
But like I said, it was entertaining enough. I'd just like to see this author really dial in, clean up their work, and zero in on boob content a bit more.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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