Jackie has always been able to instantly learn and master anything she sets her mind to. But her mind has always been set to video games.
What if she tried something else, such as exercising, changing her appearance, or becoming a goddess of sex...
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.00
- BE: 3.00
- Characters: 4.00
- Technical: 3.00
JustSomeGuy
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Technically pretty good although the dialogue and characterization could use a touchup, like Marie doesn't do much besides liking boys. More physical descriptions not just of Jackie, but everyone would be nice. It felt like the writer is more interested in abs and superstrength than boobs and just added a tiny bit of BE for the sake of this site. But on the upside, the elements of domination and power were welldone and fun and I would be down for more of that.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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