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The Overflowing Bra

HikerAngel
In a Class of Her Own
As the strongest, sexiest superpowered girl in school, Lilly takes full advantage of her status. But her world will be rocked when a far more beautiful and powerful girl, Fiona, arrives...

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 Narcho
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4 
Had me invested for all 100 or so pages. Keep writing more like these!
 Beyondhlp
Overall= 1, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 2 
Dull
 Starfox
Overall= 1, BE= 3, Characters= 1, Technical= 3 
The main character is not a very pleasant person
 idnobe
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4 
You write very well. I enjoy continuous beautificationtransformation stories so I hope you continue to write them.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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