Olivia is tired of being in Isabella's shadow. The school's prettiest and bitchiest girl, Isabella enjoyes lording her many advantages over the smaller, less-endowed girl. But the tables may be turned when Olivia discovers some experimental pills...
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.33
- BE: 3.00
- Characters: 3.33
- Technical: 4.33
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Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Pretty repetitive, Olivia preying on Isabella was a nice change of pace though. Other than that, a lot of the characters in these feel interchangeable.
Go2daWest
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
BE is a bit lacking in this story, but that can be OK.
Unfortunately, I think the character motivation was a bit lacking. Despite good writing ability, the overall fell a little flat. I hope you continue to improve! I know I still need to work on my skills.
Boris
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Havok
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 3
Eh. All your stories revolve around the supergirl kink and barely contain any BE. Just meh.
KaylaDecay
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
Like other comments have said, a lil too rushed and abrupt. Really unfortunate because this is a good, classic framework to play around within. Keeping up specific height, length, and size changes in understandable measurements legs now in long, breasts now the size of X or hang down to her X is what keeps things focused and erotic for the reader, how you share your erotic vision with us. When the descriptions lose that clarity, it just feels like the author is cumming while writing and making us read it instead of helping us cum.
WW
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Solid story idea, but it felt like it turned way too abruptly from slow growth to instant apotheosis.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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