Frank is conscious of his extremely small penis, and orders a product off the internet that will help this condition. It works better than expected, and his roommate takes notice.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.33
- BE: 2.33
- Characters: 2.33
- Technical: 3.00
Roid Abuser
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I enjoyed this story. Even if it was a bit cliche, its exactly my kind of cliche.
It was a bit rushed. Maybe come back and revisit your story and add a bit here and there. Maybe he has an encounter while shoping.
Maybe her lady friend comes over and she seduces her and the changes occur in the friend after she leaves. So she storms back looking for her lady friend and find our protagonist. Etc.
Muad
Overall= 3, BE= 1, Characters= 2, Technical= 2
Have to agree with The Fisk. The premise is good, could be developed into a great story. However right off the bat it feels a lot more like a short and rushed description of events, like you are writing an essay for school out of responsibility and not out of enjoyment.
It lacks the soul and enthusiasm of describing events, giving the characters some personality and the actual growth description.
Again, this could be turned into a great story with more time and effort.
The Fisk
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 3
This is an honest assessment. The story felt rushed. There was a lot to like nothing unusual for this website.
There was SOME B.E. description so it automatically wasn't the worst. However, there simply wasn't enough substance. I really hope you give any subsequent story another try, because there's a lot to like here.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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