After a young man receives an unexpected gift from his jock father, he discovers that they may have more in common than he first thought as he and his girlfriend swell into sex-obsessed jocks themselves.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.67
- BE: 3.00
- Characters: 5.00
- Technical: 4.67
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Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I really enjoyed this, and I have to echo Aurelian's comments you do a great job in your stories of capturing the feeling and surprise of the transformation, if you added more description of what their bodies are going through your stuff would be among the best of the genre.
JetOrange
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Love it! Can't wait for CH2
Aurelian
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Not bad! You have a very distinct voice in your work. This ended up being sort of a normal high school love story, punctuated by some growth, but I really wanted you to delve into what their bodies were going through, and how they interacted with people other than each other.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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