When a succubus finds a new target, she also finds his sexual fantasies to be a bit more than she bargained for.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 5.00
- BE: 4.50
- Characters: 4.88
- Technical: 4.63
tarkus
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
lovely, please continue this story
aeo
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Great idea, strong execution. Just a few typos.
Radellok
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
The story was great, and then the end came, which hinted of somehting amazing. PLEASE make a part 2 with the whistle!
deus
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Pretty good. There were a few typo issues, but nothing major. I would love to see this continued in a second chapter.
Anonymous reader
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I've imagined similar scenarios to this for YEARS, so it pleases me greatly to see this written down! Excellent
Kanodin
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
El Mando
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
deuxanges
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Thanks for sharing. Certainly one of the best stories I have read in some months. Just the right length too, not too long but enough to develop the plot.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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