A short story about a woman named Lilith. One night, she finds that her latest partner's semen can cause her breasts to grow.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.57
- BE: 3.14
- Characters: 2.71
- Technical: 3.57
alf
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Story is rushed. Grammarspelling are good but need to review conjugation of lie and lay, referring to lying on a bed not prevaricating She Lied on the bed is wrong. She lay on the bed is right.
Eddie
Overall= 2, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 2
It almost sounds good and then you spell stupid. The plot was jumpy and I never knew what was going on, who was there, etc. You thought stuff you didn't write down! Get an editor!
brit
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
me
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 2, Technical= 5
Pros good grasp on spelling, mechanics, characters don't change names halfway through it's more likely than you think!
I especially liked good growth and a female lead who likes her growth
Cons Poor characterization, insufficient detail outside of the growth sequence itself.
I especially disliked
The characters were flat, in inverse proportion to her bust. They didn't even have enough personality to be unlikable.
Overall
Good for a quick read once or twice but not going in my permanent stash.
Kanodin
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
You are fucking hilarious! I wouldn't read this story again for wanking material, but seriously, your sense of humor is most welcome... I cried at the mushrooms.
anon
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
The story itself was a little disjointed and didn't make all that much sense narratively but breasts sure do grow.
bad file format
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 2
who uses odt in 2018 lol.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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