The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Bit Jack
My Reality
Ben receives world and shapeshifting powers through poorly defined means. Lots of sex with some odd transformations.
Average Scores:

Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 2
Not very good. Poor grammar. Disjointed descriptions. Bizarre and distracting word choice. Just... not very good.
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 2, Technical= 2
Really like the ideas and scenarios, good creativity and relatively fresh. The technical aspects of the writing needs a lot of work, and would be if it significantly from an editor.
Felt very forced
Overall= 1, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Felt forced and poorly written. dialogue between characters is something akin to a bad Bmovie
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