The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Diner Dessert
Willa was expecting to spend the rest of her Friday night sleeping in bed, but a little bit of magical candy can really fill up one's schedule.
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Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 2
While I enjoyed this one a lot, it was 90 for the scene in the stall, as I'm an enormous sucker for smallspacefiling BE. The rest of it kept feeling like There has to be a better way to put that or That doesn't make sense based on what was said previously...

So... yeah.  Basically feels like the only parts with real effort put into the ones in the bathroom.

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Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Pretty good, I like your style and your writing. However, I feel like these stories are beginning to become formulaic and overly similar. Perhaps you should consider making a longer story or maybe even a story that has more plot? Idk, just suggestions. Keep up the good work
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