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The Overflowing Bra

Fetish Writer
Slaves to Desire
My first story, although it is quite long at 90,000 words. This tale follows Jane and Katie and their journey through their blossoming relationship and their vastly changing bodies. Contains lesbian love, bondage, domination and submission, lots of lactation, and of course massive, growing, breasts. Any and all feedback is appreciated and I would direct you to my deviantart page to do so. Thank you, and enjoy!
Average Scores:

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
My main complaint in this story is that I felt like Stockholm syndrome settled in far too quickly. Even if it was her deep rooted fantasy, it shouldn't have been mere hours before she accepted it. My second complaint is that a few of the sentences when they spoke sounded a bit forced and too blunt, with no one actually speaking like that in real life. Not even in that situation. Other then these, I think it's a brilliant story with well paced expansion and I would like to see more of your work 
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
It has the tag 'nc' which means 'nonconsensual'. What the fuck did A Concerned Citizen think that meant?
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
awesome. fuck sjws
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Grammatically, one of the better stories on the site. It's long, which is nice, but also means you probably won't consume it in one session unless you're edging. The characters are well written, but I felt the stockholm syndrome aspect is a bit rushed. It's rooted in fantasies that probably shouldn't be played out in real life ie kidnapping, but the actual bondage is mostly consensual, except for the villain. The growth could have been described better. It felt like it went really fast. 
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Wow,wow wow.  This is seriously amazing and I cant wait to read more of it.  I have no complaints and only positive things to say , great writing, great growth description ect.  I look forward to you writing more!
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Putting all 5s to counteract the SJW kink shaming moron above me.  All I am really seeing is a story deep rooted in common bondage themes. While I am not super into them, the expansion was nice enough, certainly not psychotic or rapey, seeing how the victim in question was screaming for more within minutes of being tied up. Seriously, kid, grow a pair and kindly fuck off with your judgmental holier than thou ramblings when talking about writen fetish porn.   
A Concerned Citizen
Overall= 1, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 3
This is psychotic rape and kidnap. Disgusting use of victims wanting it deep down. Yes, there are in depth descriptions and few badly written sentenances. But this is such a deeply unsettling story from such a twisted perspective, it's too filthy, even for a smut site. Unless a psychotic kidnapping and drugging turned true love is your thing. 
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
One of my alltime favorites! So milky... so sexy...
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