The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Tieryn
Uno!
Four friends are snowed in and play a very interesting game of Uno. Comments and criticism always welcome. Enjoy!
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chrisYohn
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
I enjoyed it. Fun story. Not very technical or descriptive, but you did have enough elements so I didn't lose track of who got what transformation.
brit
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
There are a bunch of stories like this, a few girl's playing a game together, but I really feel like this one stands out as one of the best.  I can't quite put my finger on why, but there's something great about it.   I really like the conversation is so quick and concise, with very lighthearted and fun.  I like that the characters enjoyed what was happening to them, and weren't too concerned with consequences.  
bloop
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Love this! A sequel with the same kinda premise would be amazing.rnNow, some constructive critique I had trouble knowing which girl was talking from time to time. And keeping track of the sizes. Try to make it clear who's talking, and make it easier to visualize the sizes at all times. When you write double the size... I don't know what it doubled from? Get it? P Overall really fun and sexy story! Keep at it! D
S
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
FANTASTIC premise, and great storytelling.rnsmashes coffee mug on the floorrnANOTHER!
amanDDa
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
That was fun.  I like how the growth was out of their control and they couldnt stop playing the game.  This is a new idea for a story.rnLoved it
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