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The Overflowing Bra

Max Mammaries
Three Wishes Gone Wrong
A college students is magically granted three wishes, and gets more than she bargained for when she wishes for larger breasts. My first story, would love to get feedback.
Average Scores:

RedGhost
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
I quite enjoyed this. The secondary characters were a bit onedimensional and some of the BE description was a little wild, but ignoring that the entire story worked very well.
Boobityboob
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
I really enjoyed the story and it's great considering it's your first one. I think you should've expanded on the story more, not only making the days longer but also explaining the characters. We barely know anything about them and they didn't have clear personalities. But overall, it was a thoroughly enjoyable read and I'm sure your future works will only get better. 
maybeenuf4u
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I enjoyed the story. Its a great twist on the 3 wishes. Please continue to write. 
anon
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
I really like the way you write and I appreciate that you seem to have done research for how bra sizes work. It makes even a fantastical story like this one feel more grounded in some sort of reality. I hope that you will keep writing, because it's nice to see newer stuff with quality like this. 
Leviathan
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I agree with everyone else that the story felt rushed, but the content is great, and I hope that you continue to write more.
OverlyEndowed
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Felt rushed, but overall a very solid story.  I felt like some of the days in the story could have been expanded by one or more pages each, especially the last few where she was truly huge, but I still greatly enjoyed this.rnrnKudos to the author for remembering that consistent increases in a circumference based measurement such as cup sizes yields an exponential increase in volume and weight.rnrnI especially loved the pregnancy.  Would kind have been nice to see it pushed even further.rnrnI hope more authors try their own take on this very cool concept.
xyz
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 2, Technical= 2
The idea for the repeating wishes is pretty unique and I like the reality altering aspect, but the story feels rushed with the physical description of the main character already in the first paragraph and every sentence and action only minimally described. rnThe actual rules of the box where also a bit confusing, to which extent do the reality alterations apply and how do the characters know rnthe rules under which the box operates ? 
ZS
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Really enjoyed the descriptions, classic kind of plot, also had some preg fetish in there, loss of control stuff, which are double plus good! Strong work. 
superdutz
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Very nicely done story. I was really excited by the changes and at how the growth was going by only 5 or 6 pages in! I would've loved to see something like an extended storyline using this concept to see more things go out of control but as is this story is really good and I'm looking forward to more!
amanDDa
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I really liked this.  it was short but not too short.  I marked the BE description down because 100 lbs over night????.  all the other growth was gradual and inline with what was going on.rnThe idea of being immobile is really a turn on for me.rnI hope you keep writing
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