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The Overflowing Bra

Rols Garten
Paul's Problems 10: The Battle of Greek Row
The final battle begins. Will Paul and the girls be able to stand up to Claudia? Will Allison become an Amazon again? Will Paul be alone on his birthday? The answers to all this and more are in the final chapter of Paul's Problems.
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SoylentOrange
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Forgive me for wrapping it all up into one review, I finally found the time to read this whole series straight though.

First of all, the series is by and large a success, inasmuch as any story that revolves around a magic dick can be. Another good one is A Gift and a Test by Ignatius Good conflicts, progression, actual challenges...  A bit too many spelling errors to get a perfect score, but nothing too egregious. 
I initially thought the number of transformations was a bit too limited, but the spidergirl's reveal in the epilogue puts it more in perspective in the sense of We've only scratched the surface. Also speaking about the epilogue, Zdemian illustrations are never a poor investment, whatever you paid for them was worth it.

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anon
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Very nicely wrapped up. I feel like the epilogue dragged on a little too long  maybe it could have been a vignetteslashsequel or something.
Kyle
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
a fantastic story from start to finish, a nice touch with images of the girls, a great theme and a great ending would like to see another story of Paul and the girls or new stories you have in the work thank you again for a brilliant story
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